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Deep Point of View and Showing vs. Telling are very similar tools a writer can use to engage a reader further into the story.
One easy way to sometimes punch up some drab tags is to add a little bit more kick to them.
“Let’s go this way,” she said.
“No, I want to go this way,” he said.
“Why?” She asked.
“Because I said so.”
It’s kind of a bland bit of dialogue. So let’s snap it up with some Deep POV.
“Let’s go this way.” The words came out in a pant as she tried to catch her breath.
“No, I want to go this way.”
“Why?” She asked, finally regaining her composure. She didn’t understand his need to go left instead of right and couldn’t understand why they were arguing about it at this moment. The longer they lingered, the more danger they were in.
“Because I said so.” There was finality to his tone, one which brooked no argument.
Deep POV doesn’t always work this way. We sometimes need the he said, she said and dialogue tags aren’t needed after every piece of dialogue. It’s a bit of a balancing act.
You want the reader to be able to follow along, but readers can get annoyed when you over do it.
“I like ice cream,” Jane said.
“Do you?” Adam asked.
“Of course,” Jane said.
“I do to,” Adam said.
“Really?” Jane asked.
It’s knowing when to add and when to subtract.
I know that’s not very helpful, but that’s why the fresh eyes of a critique partner or a good Beta reader come in handy. They can help cull things for you. I have a habit of repeating words or choosing similar names.
There are no hard and fast rules to writing. As I said before and will say again, always keep learning your craft. Your readers will thank you for it.
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